Delightful style, interesting story. If I have any criticisms they're minor.
It read like the middle of a longer story, rather than the beginning.
I get a strong, and very well done that, sense of atmosphere, but
little of place. And I was hoping for a little more explicit characterization,
particularly since what's 'under the covers' seems so interesting.
Of course, others may have very different reactions.
I like the writing of very few writers, but I liked this.
I hope you keep up with prose.